The deserted house stood in a place
The girl lazily holding her gaze
The maid looked as it as if in a daze
Her plastered smile cracking in its place
The man moved and knocked at the door
His lips crumbled and his cloths all tore
The girl waited for the silver to pour
But the maid stopped them, her anger in toll
The girl screamed then her fear to grow
The man moved finding himself low
The maid only laughed and saw the road
The deserted house it only know
-Jan @jahnavigouri
Beautiful . Love the flow. Wonderful piece.💕
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Thank you so much! I am so glad you liked it❤
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I truly did, my pleasure.💕
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The flow is wonderful!
Great poem!!
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Thank you so much akshita!!
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Delightful
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Glad you liked it. Thank you so much!
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Very welcome.
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Wowww wonderful poem! And like another commenter said, the flow was great 😊❤️
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I am so glad you liked it. Thank you so much!💕
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You’re welcome!
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You’ve done it again!! 🤩🤩
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Thank you so much for reading Riya!!😊♥️
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Wonderful post!💕
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I am so glad you liked it.Thank you so much!💛
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Flawless flow with beautiful storyline , enjoyed it a lot❤️❣️
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I am so happy you enjoyed. Thanks a lot!!❤❤
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This is such a lovely poem. It conjures up such brilliant images
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That is so nice to hear. Thank you so much Sylvie!😊
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Ah no worries ;D
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Fantastic verse, Jan. ☺️
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Thank you so much Jeff! I am happy you liked it!!😊
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You’re welcome, Jan. Always! ☺️
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I love the flow it’s an amazing poem
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Thank you so much Simran!!😊
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Your rhymes are the best part of your poem! ✨🤗🙏🏻
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Thanks a lot Maria!! I am happy to hear that!!💕
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Oh my, how sublime. Thanks for sharing.
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I am glad you liked it. You are most welcome!!😊
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Amazing poem Jan! You’re poems always brighten up my day!
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Thank you so much Betty!!
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Amazing poem Jahnavi! It’s soo good and creepy 😳 Love it!
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I am so glad you liked it. Thank you so much!!😊
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this was such a pretty poem! loved reading it💜
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Thank you so much! I am really happy you liked it!!💛
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Amazing poem. Happy to be here after a long time. 👍🙂
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I am glad you liked it. Thank you!!🌞
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Most welcome!
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Goodness me! Nice poem. Loved the flow ❤
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Thank you so much! I am glad you liked it!!😊
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‘The man moved and knocked at the door
His lips crumbled and his cloths all tore’
The maid only laughed and saw the road
The deserted house it only know’
your poems are so simple and deep! loved this one!
~Kunjal
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I am so happy to hear that Kunjal!! Thank you so much for your kind support. I really appreciate it!!😊
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