I watch from a distance
Their smiles, laughs and pain
It was a party for a reason
From ashes it was made
Deaf are some people
The others dance in rage
Joy played on a good stage
But from heart it never came
Voices played on my heart
I would never be the same
Eyes glanced at my way
Gesturing me to play
I smiled as if I enjoy
Singing in their stage
My heart ridden of any joys
The end was so away
A watch I held in my hand
Counting at the time
Minutes turned to hours
Like counting over one dime
The end did came at last
I felt so free and saved
From parties made from ashes
And fiends waiting for a play
– Jan @jahnavigouri
From parties made from ashes
And fiends waiting for a play. Absolutely loved these lines. Always a pleasure to read your poems.๐
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So happy to hear that you loved them, Devangi! Thank you so much for your encouraging words. I truly appreciate it๐
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A wonderful write, Jahn! โจโจ
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Thank you so much, Jeff! Truly happy you thought so๐
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Amazing๐
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Thank you very much! Happy you thought so
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Brilliant writing as always, Jan. It’s been amazing yo watch you grow as a writer โค๏ธ
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Thank you so much, D! I had great pleasure reading your thoughts on my writings too. Have a great week ahead!โค๏ธ
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Just so beautiful especially last stanza..โคโค
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Thank you so much! โค๏ธ
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Such an impactful piece, Jan. You always do an excellent job of painting vivid scenes, and the way the piece flows add to its beauty.
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“…adds to its beauty,” I meant to write.
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I am happy you felt so. Thank you so much for reading and commenting!! ๐
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Youโre very welcome. Thank you for sharing!
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Lovely story and ending so bright Jan๐
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I’m glad you felt so, Cindy! Thank you so much๐
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it’s s pleasure and you’re so welcome Jan! ๐
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I smiled as if I enjoy, but my heart is ridden of all the pains ~this is heart-touching poem and speaks the story of several people who hide their pain behind their smiles.
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I am happy to hear your thoughts on it, Bhavya! Thank you ๐
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You’re welcome Jahnavi โค๏ธโค๏ธ
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Also, could you please sharing your posting schedule someday? It’s really inspiring! You write consistently. I wish to do the same! I have more than enough content, but not enough time to do that. It would be nice if you share your thoughts dear!
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This is a beautiful write up
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Absolutely wonderful Jahnavi.. โค๏ธ
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Thank you so muchโฅ๏ธ
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Splendid words! Such vivid imagery
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Thank you so much!
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Your welcome
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