
Go down with the ashes
But the embers, they did spark
Pleading down to clashes
Wishes said bye and passed
Clouds get dark and darker
I see myself in a flash
Sorrow is never sweeter
With icing pink and black
Trapped in all this sharpness
I step on and then I fall
Down to somewhere safer
Everything blurred to small
Past is always my enemy
Future a friend, so far
Never had something like misery
Etched in ice and sand
– Jan @jahnavigouri
Beautifully written piece, my friend!!! I especially love the first and last verses as they tie into each other so well!!! Amazingly done as always 🤍🤗
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Thank you so much, dear Grace! So happy you liked them. Your kind words truly put a smile on my face. Thanks a lot!! ☺️🤍
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Sorrowfully moving – excellent write! ❤️
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Thank you so much!! ♥️
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Beautiful share, Jahnavi😊
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Thanks a lot, Vidah! Your kind words and support always means a lot to me. 💕
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Wonderful as always, Jan. Love it.💕
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Thanks a million, dear Grace! I appreciate your kind support and encouragement! Happy New Year! Have a great year ahead ☺️💕
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My pleasure. Thanks so much. Happy New Year, my friend.💕
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beautiful!
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Thank you so much!! 😊🌠
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Mesmerising words 🌹
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Thank you so much! I am so glad you thought so. 🌠
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beautifully expressed Jahnavi, I hope you are doing fine. 🙂
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Thank you so much! 🌠😊
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Hi Jahnavi,
You have a manner to tell or write your poems. And it’s always a pleasure to read them.
Take care.😊
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Thank you so much! So happy you liked it. 🌠
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Lovely lines…
Past is always my enemy,
Future a friend…
A well crafted poem👌👌
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I appreciate your kind words and support ✨😊
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It’s truly my pleasure 😊
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Staying present like you say is always key. Wonderful poem! 💗
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Heart touching ♥️ thank you for sharing!!! Have a wonderful 23🤩
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Thank you so much! I’m so happy you liked it. You too!! ♥️ Wishing you another wonderful blogging year ahead!☺️
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